Outside Looking In

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Submitted by Larry_Skyllz on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 3:07am
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Lonely nights of solitude,
a struggle of the heart and mind.
The object of affection I would never intrude,
losing her to my poor sense of time.
Stuck in a familiar place,
the friend zone I seem to own and operate.
If only to get as well as give a taste,
of true love for our hearts' sake.
But alas that dream has left me,
befallen another more worthy.
I only hope he can see,
the special diamond you come to be.
He has your attention and heart,
and I'm stuck with the handshake.
If only I'd came out from the start,
but no need to dwell on the unwanted you can't take.
So the secret feeling has to be kept away,
as your new chapter begins.
While my destiny started that day,
of being on the outside looking in...

Behind The Poem: 

It sucks being the third wheel to a person you have feelings for...in my case, losing to someone more worthy of her love...if you know the feeling, you the frustration and pain...Respect


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Submitted by Adele W on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 6:20am.

This is a Wonderful write Larry!!  I love the flow and the way you put it all together so lovely.  I could envision the story in my head.  This is an issue many people go through and a hard situation to be in.  Loving someone when they are into someone else.  Great job!!:-)

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Submitted by Larry_Skyllz on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 6:24am.

thanks for the comment...it really is a tough situation to be in...I'm glad you liked it

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Submitted by theSoulist on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 9:48am.

another top ranking poem I see, the friendzone is always something that guys fear and women. Totally relate to it, good write.

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Submitted by Larry_Skyllz on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 1:04pm.

thanks for the comment...it never feels good being stuck in the friend zone

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Submitted by meganloves13 on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 1:47pm.

I like the way you write. very eloquent. I know how it feels to reject someone because I love someone else though. And I know the pain I'm causing him so I'm sure he'd like this if he read it:) 

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Submitted by Larry_Skyllz on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 2:25pm.

thanks for the comment...glad you can connect with the poem

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Submitted by Lucid_Mind on Sun, 01/27/2013 - 5:34pm.

Great write man, am becoming a fan. This feels like a growing pains poem and I really dug it. I won't leave you hanging and will say that it does hurt when you like someone more than they like you, then watching someone else gain their attention.

Am sure you will be on the other side of this and see how hard it is on that side of the coin as well.

Continue to keep the honesty in your writing because I think that is the best kind of writing, that combined with your great style, am sure will produce even greater pieces.

Look forward to your next write.

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Submitted by Larry_Skyllz on Mon, 01/28/2013 - 10:48am.

thanks for the comment n support man...glad you liked it