If Today Were Your Last

great poem! i would spend my day with my family and i would tell the guy i like that i like him. i would spend more time with my loving pets and all my siblings, nieces, nephew, and i would tell my pregnant sister that i wish i could watch her son grow... i would spend my time with everone i love and who loves me... love this poem! x)

I beg to differ with the previous reviewer who took it upon herself to be the judge and jury without providing ample evidence to support her point-the-finger theory. Was this poem brilliant? Not in my opinion. But I would remind all who are artists in any form to remember that art is subjective and what is a diamond to some is another man's lump of coal. So, in her opinion your poem had no flow. Well, I would challenge her to look up what the definition of free verse is. 'Awkward, like a gauky teenager." I would also encourage her to look up how to spell the word 'gawky' before judging form and content of another poet's work.

If it is true that 'it' and 'do' are 'weak' words to have at the beginning of the poem then 'it' didn't hurt  e.e. cummings at all! He often employed the use of 'it' to begin his poems. However, I actually read this poem and learned that there was no 'it' to begin and the 'it' at the end was perfectly placed, in my opinion.  

As for what "you need" young poet with great heart and earnest expression, I woud advise you to continue to look inside your heart and soul and let what you find there pour out as you feel it should and only when you look at what you have done and are not pleased, only then, should you seek council on how to carve, inscribe, chisel or weave the words so they better mirror what you want...not what anybody else wants...only then will it be truly art. 

As for this particular poem, I wanted to say that I do live every day as if it will be my last because I have been given a premonition that I am going to die young and living that way, as if you are dying, is a most wonderful way to live! What do I do? I LIVE! I LOVE! I LAUGH! And I dare to face my fears and the idiotic ideas that were brainwashed into me to believe. Challenge the status quo...I take the road less travelled and it rocks! 

Thank you for sharing your truth, your gift. Keep writing! Like any other talent, the more you do it the better you become at it! Keep writing!!!! 

Char. 

this hits deep, I've always thought about this aand have never been able to answer truthfully but this made me really think about it, might have made me cry a bit but still.